Ok, so I thought i'd put up my first draft of death metal lyrics onto this page (the first time I put this up, not the first lyrics) for some critique since I know i'm not failsafe.
This song is meant to be growled, Cannibal Corpse style with low pitched growls, if you don't know what i'm talking about, check out this link and hear his growling.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=0IOHmGMenS0Submerged to death by Tobias Höggren:
Claustrophobic trauma.
The cold of the deeps.
Lungs filled with water.
Desperate gasps for life.
You will die by the hands of the deep.
Submerged to death.
Your struggle is useless!
Claustrophobic suffocation underwater.
Your demise will be in the deep.
Your gasps of air are useless!
Freezing terror of water.
Will be your *high pitch* DEATH!!!
You will die by the hands of the deep.
Submerged to death.
Your struggle is useless!
Claustrophobic suffocation underwater!
The muscles will cease their work.
The body will go numb.
Consciousness slipping.
Submerged to death!
You will die by the hands of the deep.
Your struggle is useless!
Claustrophobic suffocation underwater!
Submerged to death!