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« on: July 17, 2009, 05:23:07 PM »
What do you think of this 55-word story I wrote as a challenge? I'm pretty sure I could expand and continue it, but I'm not sure how, or even if I should mess with it at all. I'd like to hear some good ideas!


The Scrapbook

"How was breakfast?"

She smiles in response. "Fantastic." Just like always. David leans forward to kiss her cheek and leaves.

Anna dresses. The hidden scrapbook is in her hands. "Man Killed in Tragic Accident." The page turns. A receipt. "Thank You for choosing Paradise Robotics."

When he returns he doesn't know why she is crying.
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« Reply #1 on: July 20, 2009, 04:48:54 AM »
I really liked that. An awesome four lines  Smiley
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« Reply #2 on: July 21, 2009, 02:22:24 PM »
Yeah man.... That is good! Really good!
Two thumbs up on that, incredible conveyance for four lines.  Bigfoot Bigfoot
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« Reply #3 on: January 13, 2010, 03:05:15 PM »
Best 55-word story i think i have ever read! Goodjob!!! Some one could use that and make it huge!!! Grin Grin Grin
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