Chad in The City, my first proper flash cartoon

[Jack Bz]

http://www.newgrounds.com/portal/view/556931

Thought I'd make an actual thread here! Yup.

[kevaleb]

"It wont happen again..probably" 

That was pretty good. (I could see a little Adam Phillips inspiration in there)

One bit of advice though... I think it would be much better if it were sped up a bit like probably double time. (Not the Animation mind you, the story)

It had funny pieces but if they just arrived a little faster it would be much better.

But over all good job and congratulations on completing your first proper Flash cartoon.

[Jack Bz]

Thanks for your comments! I very much agree about the pace of this thing, and I admit that part of it was sometimes just that I'd spent ages on a background and wanted it to linger a bit so it didn't feel like a big waste to put that much effort in (along with being generally new to this sort of thing anyway) but yeah, hopefully if I make a new episode I'll have that completely fixed.

And yeah, I basically ripped off Adam with the text at the start haha.

[Copper Valentine]

Haha, note to self:
Don't take drugs from creepy little bums in alleys - it never leads to good things.
Nice work, I'm looking forward to seeing what you have for the next episode.

[Jack Bz]

Thanks dude. Plan to start it when my tablet arrives.