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« on: June 06, 2011, 06:28:38 AM » |
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Hello all -- this is my ongoing online project, a graphics-enhanced serial dieselpunk novel... The web address is: Here's a virtual "poster" for the project, from back when it began (not all that long ago!): All feedback is of course heartily welcome, and I'm looking forward to reading the ongoing posts in this section too...! Cheers, CKilgore |
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« Reply #1 on: June 07, 2011, 11:08:55 AM » |
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I didn't have the time to read through everything (sorry!), but I've got some thoughts on what I did see.
First of all, very neat concept! I'm a fan of the phrase "graphics-enhanced serial dieselpunk novel" and may have to use it at least once a day to supplement my daily language...
The visual style of the website is rather cool. I light all of the lights and symbols and such. The site does seem a bit buggy and awkwardly laid out. Sometimes buttons go all freaky on me, and I got an error where the end of chapter 2 the next page button only gave me 404 pages and I had to hit the next chapter button to get to chapter 3. Also, the Jump function could use a little work - a false set of numbers gives you an ugly 404 error, where you could have something prettier... Last comment on the website itself: I started out by reading the first chapter and was somewhat confused by how everything was laid out. It was only later that I found and read the "Getting Started" page which explains everything. Maybe have it as a suggested reading at the beginning? I don't know...
I like the work itself a whole lot. The Arlen story is tantalizingly mysterious. The illustrations are great - I'm a sucker for ink illustrations and hatching for shading. And while I didn't read too much of the writing, what I read was excellent. Taking on a giant project where you do everything is an impressive achievement, and besides the strangeness of the website, I think you're doing a fantastic job. I'll definitely read this through when I have more time.
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« Reply #2 on: June 07, 2011, 11:21:40 PM » |
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Many thanks for the feedback!
You're so right about the 404 page -- I've got to get that designed and implemented!
Sorry about the error at the end of Chapter 2 as well -- I'm a bit of a coding n00b (it's all javascript and html, *sigh!* I need to learn Flash), so I'm not yet sure what might have caused that. I'll see if I can replicate it, and maybe track that bug down and squash it. If you have a moment, what browser were you using?
Thanks Again!
CKilgore
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« Reply #3 on: June 13, 2011, 12:17:11 AM » |
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Update: The new 404 page has been implemented, replete with a "restore" function! Needs a bit of work still, I suspect, but much better than the generic version...
I've also caught & squished a few typos in some early code from Chapters 1 and 2 -- might have been responsible for some errors...
Thanks again to all who have bug-tested!
Cheers,
CKilgore
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« Reply #4 on: June 13, 2011, 01:23:52 AM » |
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Yeah, I tried to get that error at the end of Chapter 2 and couldn't. Probably had to do with the browser I was using the first time (a REALLY old version of Firefox... I'm so embarrassed...) I wouldn't worry about it.
New 404 looks snazzy! I feel bad, because I still haven't actually read it through yet... I've just been very busy lately. I'll definitely try to find time this coming week to read through everything so I can give you my thoughts on the writing.
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« Reply #5 on: June 15, 2011, 04:15:17 AM » |
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Heh, no hurry -- at the moment I'm scrambling to try to get Chapter Eight ready for its 6/30 release...! Part of the personal challenge with this project is to see if I can turn around 4+ new illustrations and a new chapter of type-set text every month... It's turning out to be -- a challenge!
Next challenge: this weekend I finally got to see the site on an iPad, and it has... Prrrrroblems...! Heh, there's no "mouseover" on a touch-screen... Hmmmm... (...mental gears turning...)
Love the new Escher BwH, by the way! Slinkies!
Cheers,
CKilgore
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« Reply #6 on: July 21, 2011, 03:21:59 AM » |
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seems like a good project, keep it going
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« Reply #7 on: August 12, 2011, 01:29:17 PM » |
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Hey, thanks for checking it out!
I've been out of the digital loop for a bit, due to a relocation from New Jersey to Texas (heeeectic!). But the project continues to advance -- a new chapter is on track, and should be up in another couple of weeks...
Cheers,
CKilgore
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Welcome back! The site migration is complete and normal service resumed.
